Friday, January 22, 2010
The Very Last Moment
Sixteen-year-old Grace Bradbury left the doctors office in complete shock, her mother acting morose at her side. Just the night before is when she found the mysterious bruises on her ribcage, and when she pointed them out to her doctor, she was sent for some tests. But now that the tests were over, it was clear what Grace had: Leukemia.
Grace was a normal teenage girl before all this happened. She had a boyfriend named Ray Tymes, who decided to dump her after she told him the news concerning her health status. She had a father, who left her mother and her when he decided he had enough. She had A’s and B’s as grades, and a garrulous personality to go with them. Grace had recently got her license, but she was an obstante driver and never let anyone get away with anything.
Ever since she got the disease, Grace’s mother Nancy has been by her side. That was until about six months ago when she developed a drinking problem. She started because it took off all the stress of reality, but now she has been unable to make educated decisions for her dying daughter. Instead of being by Grace’s side, Nancy has been to bars instead of doctors appointments, or even the drugstore instead of sitting on the end of her daughter’s hospital bed. Grace felt as though she was being rebuffed by her mother, and for the time being, she was able to concur.
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“Mom, Dr. Bracton will be here in just a sec. He wants you to make a decision,” Grace said to her mother patiently.
“Oh yeah? A decision?” Nancy countered back in a seditious tone. She had just gotten back from the bar, and was drunk and confound. Just then, the doctor came in.
“How are you two ladies today?” Asked Dr. Bracton politely, noticing how dizzy Nancy looked as he was doing so.
“We’re just fine Doc. Now lets get this show on the road!” Nancy said with little revere for the doctor. He shot a glance at Grace, and she just rolled her eyes as if this was no big deal.
“Okay, this is going to be a quick appointment,” he looked over at Grace. “I’m just going to quickly examine you, and uh, we’ll see where you’re at before we go any further. Sound good?” Grace nodded her head with a dreadful look. She already knew what was going to happen. She wasn’t going to be well, and is going to need a transplant or Chemo or something else she couldn’t have.
As she was being examined, Grace thought about how her life was changed. She hated having cancer. She felt as though she was being held back, or trapped all the time. It was hard to handle, and she felt like she had a lot of luggage.
“Okay Grace, I think you know what’s happening here,” Dr. Bracton began. “You aren’t doing well, and-” Just then, Grace released fountains of blood from her mouth and nose.
“Hey Grace, time to wake up girl! What are you doin’, sleepin’ in fruit punch?” Nancy said in a garbled tone. Dr. Bracton immediately picked up the phone and dialed the emergency number.
“Unstable cancer patient, room 221 in the leukemia wing, needs medical assistance pronto.” He jogged over to where Grace was lying, and gently shoved Nancy away.
“Hey, this is my daughter, and we’re leaving!” Screamed Nancy.
“No! You don’t understand, she isn’t permitted to leave this hospital in this condition,” Ordered the Doctor. By now the staff was there to bolster Grace, and take her away for some medical attention.
“Ms. Bradbury-”
“I’m divorced, My name is Ms. Jashel to you, Doc,” Said the truculent Nancy as another Doctor, Dr. Williams, came into the blood-stained room.
“My apologies, Ms. Jashel. But by the looks of her exam, Grace needs some emergency Chemo therapy, the only other choice is a bone-marrow transplant. But in order to have the transplant done, she needs a donor. So she’d be on the waiting list of over 100 people, and this wouldn’t be able to be done now. So her only option is for Chemo therapy, and we need your permission to do that,” Dr. Bracton explained.
“No. No! No! No! My daughter has been through too much, and we’re done here. She isn’t having the therapy, not now, and not ever!” Yelled Nancy in a nefarious voice. She was still drunk, and very slow.
“But you can’t just stand here and let your daughter die! She can live if she receives this therapy, or at least hopefully be stable for the time being! Why won’t you let your daughter receive this therapy?” Dr. Bracton was now being tenacious about the situation, and unable to take no for an answer.
“I said no, I mean no. N-O. Now let me see my daughter,” Nancy urged.
“But-”
“Doctor,” Said Dr. Williams who was still in the room. “You can’t make the decision for this family. It’s her child, not yours.”
“But- She’s killing her daughter. I- Ugh. Lets go see Grace to see her views before a decision is made,” Suggested Dr. Bracton.
Grace was in critical condition, she was very unkempt. Her hair was all over the place, her clothes stained with blood. She looked as if she was wizened, and just drifting away. She slowly looked up at her mom and doctor.
“Grace, honey, we’re leaving. Get up, lets go.” Grace looked at her mom then at her doctor. She then slowly started to rise from the hospital bed.
“Whoa, Grace! It doesn’t have to be this way. You can stay here and get treated, this isn’t the only option,” Pleaded the doctor.
“I know, but I’ve made my decision. Not my mom’s, but mine. I’m ready to go, I’ve had enough.” Everyone in the room looked at her, and could tell she was being sincere and that she really wanted to leave. So one by one, doctors made a path to let Grace hobble out the door.
“Bye Dr. Bracton, I’m sorry I let you down. But I have to do this.”
At the very last moment, Dr. Bracton waved and a tear dripped down his face. Doctors aren’t supposed to have emotional attachments to there patients, but Dr. Bracton has grown close to Grace over the past year.
“Bye Grace,” he said before she walked out the door, knowing he will never see her again. He then turned around and summoned all of the staff members to get back to work, and walked to the waiting room and greeted a brand new patient.
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1- the main characters are grace and nancy.
ReplyDelete2- the conflict is internal. the conflict is that grace has leukemia.
3- the climax was when blood sprouted from grace's mouth and nose.
4- i think the resolution was really good. it was really sad though.
5- yes, the story did seemed believable.
6- the author's greatest strenth is describing the setting and what is going on.
7- i think this story is perfect.
1. The conflict of the story is that Grace has to deal with her life of cancer and everything surrounded with it.
ReplyDelete2. The character changes in the story because for 16 years she didn't have cancer and now she does. It is a pain to go through and she decided she couldn't go through it anymore.
3. My favorite part of the story was the opening as it was really well-written and it drew me in. "Sixteen-year-old Grace Bradbury left the doctors office in complete shock, her mother acting morose at her side."
4. The tale's best quality would have to be the writing style which used fantastic adjectives and details and also the amount of emotion and realism in the story.
5. I think that the story's theme might be to not let anthing get in your way and to continue to fight.
6. The story is perfect itself, but one thing I would suggest is to leave a comment to yourself that includes your 15 vocab words used in the story.
1) The conflict of the story is that Grace has cancer, and her mother is a drunk, and needs serious medicle help. Her mother refuses to giver her a translplant, and so Grace decides to give up on fighting her cancer.
ReplyDelete2)Grace chnges in the story because for most of her life, she didnt have Leukemia, and then she discovered she had it. She changes at the end because she gives up hope. Her mother was factored into that' and was a part of her hopelessness.
3)My favorite part of the story is when they are in the hospital room, and then Grace starts spilling blood everywhere. you used great dialouge and description. i could really picture everything that was going on in the story.
4)This storys best qualities is the used of description, and dialouge. you have a talent for writing and you really make the reader feel as if they are in the main characters position.
5)I think that the storys theme is to never give up hope, even when you think you have none left. There are other ways to solve your problems. Dont ever take the easy way out. Its selfish.
6)Everything is awsome! the only thing you should consider adding is a list of your vocab words.
Great job! :)
1. The conflict of the story is that Grace has cancer and is sort of battling it by herself because her mother is an alcoholic. It was resolved when Grace made the decision to not have treatment and therefor die. I was very invested in this story. It is extremely dramatic so doesn't need more.
ReplyDelete2. The main character Grace, changes as she gives up hope. As soon as she found out she had cancer she just dealt with it. But at the end, she gave up. She might have lived if she had taken the treatment.
3. My favorite part of the story was when Grace decides what she wants to do. '“I know, but I’ve made my decision. Not my mom’s, but mine. I’m ready to go, I’ve had enough.” Everyone in the room looked at her, and could tell she was being sincere and that she really wanted to leave. So one by one, doctors made a path to let Grace hobble out the door.' This stood out to me because she's saying she's ready to leave the hospital but what she means is she's ready to leave this world.
4. The story's best qualities are description and conflict. It's a heartbreaking but common topic that not many know. You usually think of old people having cancer, not teenagers. With the description and characters you can feel and understand what Grace went through.
5. The theme is to never give up, hope or in general. That there's always more hope out there even if you have to look for it. That our life was intended to be lived to the fullest, even in the hardest of situations.
6. I agree with Amanda. This story was amazing! Great job!
wow this story is really good! i love the plot even though its so sad! :( great job
ReplyDeleteThe conflict of this story is Grace has cancer and must solve things on her own because her mother is an alcoholic.
ReplyDeleteI would have to say, I liked how you made the mother, (Nancy) totally act exactly like a drunk. It made me laugh, although it did show how poorly she was towards her daughter. “Hey Grace, time to wake up girl! What are you doin’, sleepin’ in fruit punch?” I really enjoyed reading this quote. Once again I laughed, her mother is so confused its..sad. I liked how you related the blood that was all over her to fruit punch. :)
I think the description part in this story is really great. It gives the reader more of a picture to the writing.
The theme is to have courage to get through things.
I really enjoyed your story the way it is, keep it that way. ^_^
VOCABBBBB: morose, garrulous, obstante, rebuffed, concur, seditious, confound, revere, garbled, bolster, truculent, nefarious, tenacious, unkempt, wizened.
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